Gramur reenforsmint: Describe the action verb

Proving that bad writing breaks the writer’s “conversation” with the reader, I stopped when I read this in today’s recap of yesterday’s Phillies/Nationals game:

Michaels spoke over a blaring Linkin Park/Jay-Z collaboration that blared over a battered boom box he found earlier in the day amid some junk in the bowels of RFK.

Blaring music that blared? Who’da thunk it?

One thought on “Gramur reenforsmint: Describe the action verb”

  1. The unnecessary use of alliteration is what ticks me off. You don’t see the great writers – Hemingway, Steinbeck, CLIFF – showing off like that.

Comments are closed.